Author Topic: Sorrento's Poetry  (Read 2620 times)

Sorrento

  • Silver Saint with powerful Cosmo
  • **
  • Posts: 803
  • あなた わ だれ?
    • View Profile
Sorrento's Poetry
« on: July 18, 2007, 11:56:09 AM »
Okay, so here you can post some poetry. -If you want too, tho

here's one of mine, but I'm not sure if it's good

anyways...

The garden of purity

I was sitting in the garden of purity,
Lost in my emotional prison
And then, I saw a girl with a rare beauty
and it felt like there was a connection,
As if the reality was gone and became fantasy

She was pure, like a flower
Her smile was as radiant as the sun
But her eyes were as captivating as the moon
And I was impure, it was my last hour
Everytime I smile, the people run
My eyes were like those of a dark moon

But stil...

She came next to me
She wanted to see...
A smile, radiant as hers
But when I smiled,
Emotions from inside became flowers

That time we talked,
And together we walked.
We were sitting in the garden of purity,
together, as we were ment to be
« Last Edit: July 18, 2007, 12:00:28 PM by Sorrento »
Harem: Sorrento+Poseidon+Athene+Zeus+Artemis+Lyra Orpheus+Apollo+Isaac+Myu+Mime+Marin+Crius+Oceanus+Siegfried+Thetis+Hestia+Rhuax+Brontes+Phlox Shared: Demeter, Sphinx

Shaina [シャイナ]

  • Ophiuchus Gold Saint
  • Administrator
  • Awakened to the 8th Sense
  • *****
  • Posts: 6698
  • A Heart for Ice Saints and Idiot Crabs
    • View Profile
    • Stayka's Saint Seiya Archive
Re: Sorrento's Poetry
« Reply #1 on: July 18, 2007, 12:03:59 PM »
You used some nice imagery in your poem. I'm curious to read some more of you!

Shainas Harem: Camus, DeathMask, Manigoldo + Dégel. Adopted: Shaina, Alberich, Hyoga, Jabu, Yato + Cassios.

Sorrento

  • Silver Saint with powerful Cosmo
  • **
  • Posts: 803
  • あなた わ だれ?
    • View Profile
Re: Sorrento's Poetry
« Reply #2 on: July 18, 2007, 12:29:56 PM »

Cupido's sorrow

Why?

Why is it  that I hold the arrow called love?
Why is it that Shoot on people from above?
Why is it that I shoot on people's frozen hearts?
Why does it seems like playing with darts?
Why do I have to suffer from this Sorrow?
This is my fate, the fate of the painfull arrow....
Harem: Sorrento+Poseidon+Athene+Zeus+Artemis+Lyra Orpheus+Apollo+Isaac+Myu+Mime+Marin+Crius+Oceanus+Siegfried+Thetis+Hestia+Rhuax+Brontes+Phlox Shared: Demeter, Sphinx

Shaina [シャイナ]

  • Ophiuchus Gold Saint
  • Administrator
  • Awakened to the 8th Sense
  • *****
  • Posts: 6698
  • A Heart for Ice Saints and Idiot Crabs
    • View Profile
    • Stayka's Saint Seiya Archive
Re: Sorrento's Poetry
« Reply #3 on: July 18, 2007, 12:32:09 PM »
Concise and to the point. The rhymes are fitting - now the next step would be to experiment with meter (=rhythm)

Shainas Harem: Camus, DeathMask, Manigoldo + Dégel. Adopted: Shaina, Alberich, Hyoga, Jabu, Yato + Cassios.

Sorrento

  • Silver Saint with powerful Cosmo
  • **
  • Posts: 803
  • あなた わ だれ?
    • View Profile
Re: Sorrento's Poetry
« Reply #4 on: July 19, 2007, 12:46:20 AM »
ok

The Rebelion

There's a Rebelion
The Rebelion of asterion
It's a revolutionary organisation
Their flag is black with a golden griffon
They spread the good with satisfaction
The rebelion of Asterion goes on...

                                                             

The call of duty of a knight

I wish that I was a Winged knight
So that I can protect you
I wish that I was stronger than the darkest creatures of the night
The services that I do for you are priceless
For you, there isn't anything that I won't do

because...

You're my dear, beloved princess

                                                                       

Entwined with chains

You...

You made me entwined with chains
I have no feelings
Yet, my love for you is all that remains
I want you and me, together, as twins
Together, as chained beings
Become entwined with the chains of love
Cause at the end, love wins
And if you are, then let Cupido be our protector from above


Now we're entwined with chains,
Chains of love,
Entwined together
Our Reunited feeling will be all that remains
Protected by our protector from above
Our destiny is to be together, forever
« Last Edit: July 19, 2007, 12:47:16 AM by Sorrento »
Harem: Sorrento+Poseidon+Athene+Zeus+Artemis+Lyra Orpheus+Apollo+Isaac+Myu+Mime+Marin+Crius+Oceanus+Siegfried+Thetis+Hestia+Rhuax+Brontes+Phlox Shared: Demeter, Sphinx

Shaina [シャイナ]

  • Ophiuchus Gold Saint
  • Administrator
  • Awakened to the 8th Sense
  • *****
  • Posts: 6698
  • A Heart for Ice Saints and Idiot Crabs
    • View Profile
    • Stayka's Saint Seiya Archive
Re: Sorrento's Poetry
« Reply #5 on: July 20, 2007, 06:55:40 AM »
Nice! BTW, if you write Saint Seiya poetry, then you might start an additional thread with that poetry in Saint Seiya Fanfics!

Shainas Harem: Camus, DeathMask, Manigoldo + Dégel. Adopted: Shaina, Alberich, Hyoga, Jabu, Yato + Cassios.

Sorrento

  • Silver Saint with powerful Cosmo
  • **
  • Posts: 803
  • あなた わ だれ?
    • View Profile
Re: Sorrento's Poetry
« Reply #6 on: August 13, 2007, 07:09:00 AM »
yup,  :shun+june:

                                                                       

I was troubled when I recognized your face
Because you left me whithout a single trace

The space between us drived me insane
Especially when you came

Yet, our relation remains
Even now, in those heavy rains

                                                                                         

Reach out for the northern lights
I really don't know who you are
But you seem familiar
Ancient bonds from the past
Are reunified by a hazardous cast

On your path I will shine the Northern lights
That shall guide you through the nights
Your hesitation is my new determination
And our bond is a new creation

An ancient strange theory:
Is that your view upon destiny?
Reach out for those Northern lights
And my wish for peace shall guide you through the hardest fights

                                                                                                   

The edge of reason
The edge of reason
Shall break in this season
The weed of evil shall perish in the rain
And the prospherous flowers of justice shall remain

                                                                                   

For the first poem I couldn't think of a good title. Does someone else has a good idea?
Harem: Sorrento+Poseidon+Athene+Zeus+Artemis+Lyra Orpheus+Apollo+Isaac+Myu+Mime+Marin+Crius+Oceanus+Siegfried+Thetis+Hestia+Rhuax+Brontes+Phlox Shared: Demeter, Sphinx